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Old 03-28-2008, 01:46 AM
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I'm Sorry.
Thats what you say.
But what are you sorry for?
Do you really know,
Or are you just saying so?
Do you need to apologize,
Or do I? Perhaps It is me,
That is in the wrong.
Perhaps.
Perhaps we have each gone,
Left each other, not realizing so.
We, I still care.
If I didn't, sorry
wouldn't matter.
But it does, it rips at us,
It is the reason we are so unhappy.
Sorry is the root of our problems.
What if we were to just let go,
Chins held high with vindication.
Our actions justified.
Although mine aren't.
They aren't justified!
I don't know why I do what I do.
I can't give you a reason.
Though there should be one.
I should know why I get upset,
Why I get frustrated.
Why I am so wrapped up in you,
that I no longer know myself,
know my own actions.
That is a scary place to be.
To be in a place where you are
no longer who you though you were,
and certainly not who you ought to be.
But who ought I be?
And odd question, for I've known the answer
since I was young
I ought to be who I am.
I ought to be me.
Easier said than done,
It's hard to be me when I don't know who I am.
But who am I?
Am I merely words to describe who I am as a person?
Perhaps that is all things are.
Words.
For in the end,
Sorry is just
A Word.
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Old 03-28-2008, 06:02 PM
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While it is interesting and I think the poem ends very well, the upper portion of it , maybe the first half or two thirds, doesn't flow well. It makes it a little hard to read. Of course I have always been more partial to poems that I can pick out a distinct paternm wether it was ryme, line liength, sylible count or something else like that that gives it its own rythem for reading the poem.
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Thanks for the input, I noticed that a bit too. I was playing with sentance structure how if I end a line at one point, it means something completly different if I end it at another.

Ex:
We, I still care.
If I didn't, sorry
wouldn't matter.

by ending the line at sorry you stop and think that maybe the voice of the poem is thinking that maybe she didn't show she cared and is apologizing. However, if you read the sentence through, you then see that she is talking about how sorry doesn't matter if there isn't meaning behind it. If that makes sense?
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Yes I think so
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